Wednesday, November 20, 2013

Formal Essay 1 Final Draft


Mingdong Chen

Freshman composition

Ms. Nargiza Matyakubova

September 27 2013

Literacy narrative

 

                                    Learning English as an immigrant

 

I would like to briefly introduce myself to you in the beginning; my name is Mingdong Chen who is an immigrant from China in 2010. I am 21 years old this year. I have been in United States for 3 years or so with my mother and old sister. My family lives in an small apartment in Brooklyn, I learn to be independent in United States with the helps of my parents and high school’s teachers, being capable of bravely facing any challenges come any time, dealing with difficulty, keeping unmovable during the hard times since everyone has his own business. Language is a bridge of communication with people, so I am gradually learning to speak English. However, I do not practice speaking often it, I used to learn the language by myself instead of discussing with others, I do not know what reasons cause me to be like that, but there are two things I want to share with you, my pleasure reading and my personal experiences of writings.

                     I have my “tiny library” in my bedroom created by my father. It is a desk which leans on the wall. With the increasing of the number of my books, my father decided to make a bookshelf for me. He installed an flat wood 12-inches above the desk into the wall with his own methods, then he continuous installed the second one same high as the first time above the desk, he carefully constructed it and made it strong enough to support the heavy books. With the emergence of the “tiny-library”, I can put the book I would like to read on the bookshelf, which can force me to open it and read it when I see it, because I found an habit I have. If I always put away the books and put them inside the box, I would not see them in daily, so I would not read them consciously. With the appearance of “tiny library”, it looks as if an alarm clock that remind me of reading book on time when I see them, it also offers comfortable environment for my daily reading as well as reinforcing my personal habits of reading books on the desk instead of laying in the bed, or just sitting on the floor. And I am getting fond of sitting the wooden chair closes to the desk reading what I want as time passes, “tiny-library” looks like as a teacher leads me to the road of literacy

In my own homeland, in fact, I personally seldom read the extracurricular books during from the periods of the elementary school to middle school to high school, but I usually did the sports and played the basketball with my classmates after school, and then finished the homework at home, so I seldom did the reading unless the teachers required me to do that. I am here to confess that my personal experiences of reading is little, but which does not mean that I am not able to the reading work, I just seldom read the books from out of class, however I usually carefully read my textbook, I will underline the sentences or some special vocabularies while I am reading, and figure out the meaning of words or sentences which may be related to the main idea of the article. Sometimes I will copy down the format of sentences expressed in the article; I may learn to use its format in my personal writing in the next time. After finishing reading, I may write down the main ideas of the article in short sentences and its lessons leaves on the margin side. Studying English in the United States, my personal reading experiences has changed with the movement of place. In the English class of ESLFirst, I will intend to find out the meaning of vocabularies I don’t know by looking up them in the dictionary in my cellphone. Second, I will try my best to understand the meaning of the whole sentence by combining the meaning of vocabularies I found before. However, sometimes there are lots of different interpretations for one word, so that I do not know which definition of word I need to choose to make the meaning of the whole sentence sound correct.

                     The first high school in United States I attended was Manhattan Comprehensive Day and Night High School which is located in between 14th street and 15th street, second Ave in Manhattan, maybe very few people heard about it. I spent almost three years to study ESL English program from level 1 to level 5 with my teachers’ help in that high school. I could have had a chance to jump directly from level 2 to level 4, but I insisted that I should follow step by step if I really longed to learn English very well. In the daily English class, we usually did the writing work, some reading work, a little speaking work and very little listening work. So I intended to be better at writing and reading parts, and the lack of speaking and listening. Even though I could do better in writing, however I had some habits of writing which I didn’t know if they were positive or negative to me, I used to spend some hours on how to arrange the paragraphs of each essay, what should I write down in each paragraph to make it look perfect, and what kind of words or vocabularies should I use in each sentence to make it sound vivid, I thought I had a lot of work to do to prepare the beginning of each essay before I started to write down it, did everyone have same experiences as me? So I profess that I cannot be able to writing a perfect essay in limited time. Also I would like to arrange or make sentences in my mind before I speak out to someone because my spoken English is not good enough I think, and sometimes I would forget the spelling of words I didn’t use them often. In the beginning of learning ESL English, I thought I learned a lot of useful English skills or experiences from my teachers’ lectures and the some grammar books which I studied by myself when I had free time, but I gradually got a strange phenomenon in the later days of learning English, which was that I felt like I learned less and less English skills in daily English courses later, and I do not like to talk with people in English. in other words, I might considered that there was nothing could make me interested in learning English again.

                     All in all, I hope teachers can provide me with lots of important and valuable suggestion on listening, speaking, readings and writings in the future days of college, and helps me regain the interests and enthusiasm of learning English .What’s more, the above some bad habits I have shown can be corrected, and I long to learn lots of or different kinds of vocabularies and improve my memory toward the spelling. So I am looking forward to the help from you.

                     In conclusion, we all know admittedly that offering rewards can be an incentive that attract students to study hard and get good performance, but we must bear in mind the main purpose of studying knowledge is itself-----------education, that is it. It is enough that we own a pure heart to study, do not disoriented by the extraneous things. Be yourself!

Formal Essay 1 First Draft


Freshman composition                               August 30 2013

Ms.Nargiza Matyakubova                            Mingdong Chen

 

 

                     In the beginning, I would like to briefly introduce myself to you; my name is Mingdong Chen who is an immigrant from China in 2010. I am 21 years old this year. I have come to United States for 3 years or so with my mother and old sister, my families live in an apartment in Brooklyn, I learn to be independent in United States with the help of my parents and high school’s teachers, and I gradually learn to speak English but not often to practice it, I used to learn by myself instead of discussing with others, I don’t know what reasons cause me to be like that, but there are two things I want to share with you, my pleasure reading and my personal  experiences of writings.

                     I have my “tiny library” in my bedroom created by my father; it is a desk which leans on the wall. With the increasing of the number of my books, my father decided to make a bookshelf for me, he installed an flat wood 12 inches above the desk into the wall with his methods, then he continuous installed the second one same high as the first time above the desk, he carefully constructed it and made it strong enough to support the heavy books. With the emergence of the “tiny-library”, I can put the book I would like to read on the desk, which can force me to open it and read it when I see it, because I found an habit I have, if I put away the books and put them inside the box, so that I would not see them in daily, so I would not read them. Anyway, the appearance of “tiny library”, it looks as if a clock that remind me of reading book on time when I see them.

In my own homeland, began from the elementary school to middle school to high school, actually I personally seldom read the extracurricular books, but I usually did the sports and played the basketball with my classmates after school, and finished the homework at home, so I seldom did the reading unless the teachers required me to do that, I am here to confess that my personal experiences of reading are few, but which does not means that I am not able to the reading work, I just seldom read the books from out of class, however I usually carefully read my textbook, I will underline the sentences or some special vocabularies while I am reading, and figure out the meaning of words or sentences which may be related to the main idea of the article. Sometimes I will copy down the format of sentences expressed in the article; I may learn to use it in my personal writing of the next time. After finishing reading, I may write down the main ideas of the article and its lessons left on the margin side. Study English in the United States, my personal reading experiences was changed with the movement of place. In the English class of ESL, First I will intend to find out the meaning of vocabularies I don’t know by looking up them in the dictionary. Second, I will try my best to understand the meaning of the whole sentence by combining the meaning of vocabularies I found before, however. Sometimes there are lots of different interpretations for one word, so that I do not know which meaning of word I need to choose to make the whole sentence sound correct.

                     The first high school in United States I attended was Manhattan Comprehensive Day and Night High School which is located in between 14th street and 15th street, second Ave in Manhattan, maybe very few people heard about it. I spent almost three years to study ESL English program from level 1 to level 5 with my teachers’ help in that high school, I could have had a chance to jump from level 2 to level 4 but I insisted that I should follow step by step if I really longed to learn English very well. In the daily English class, we usually did the writing works, some reading works, few speaking works and very few listening works, so I intended to be good at writing and reading parts, and the lack of speaking and listening. Even though I could do better in writing, however I had some habits of writing which I didn’t  know if they were positive or negative to me, I used to spend some hours on how to arrange the paragraphs of each essay, what should I write down in each paragraph to make it look perfect, and what kind of words or vocabularies should I use in each sentence to make it sound vivid, I though I had a lot of work to do to prepare the beginning of each essay before I started it, did everyone have same experiences as me? So I profess that I cannot be able to writing a perfect essay in limited time. Also I would like to arrange or make sentences in my mind before I speak out to someone because my spoken English is not good enough I think, and I would sometime forgot the spelling of words I didn’t use them often. In the beginning of learning ESL English, I thought I learned a lot of useful English skills or experiences from my teachers’ lectures and the some grammar books which I studied by myself when I had free time, but I got a strange phenomenon in the later days of learning English, which was that I felt like I learned less and less English skills in daily English courses later, in other words, I might considered that there was nothing could make me interested in learning English again.

                     All in all, In the future days in college, I hope teachers can provide me with lots of important and valuable suggestion on listening, speaking, readings and writings and so on. What’s more, the above some bad habits I have shown can be corrected, and I long to learn lots of or different kinds of vocabularies and improve my memory toward the spelling. So I am looking forward to the help from you.

Journal Entry 10


Mingdong Chen

Freshman composition

Ms. Nargiza Matyakubova

19 November 2013

Journal Entry 10

                              Live In the Moment

              With the social fast development, different work, income differences, these changes cause the differences between social positions of humankinds; this is what social pressures are. Marriage is an unavoidable experiment that most everyone in the world must undergo anyway, so do I. With the increasing oldness of my age, my parents curiously question me if I have made a girlfriend from time to time, my answer to them is no. I also ask them not to worry about my future marriage. Sometime my parents and I have a bitter quarrel about if I have a girlfriend, they consider that I do not like to communicate with others is problem, what’s more, I seldom bring any female friends to my home, which may causes them to worry more about my relationship with others; it would be specific to say social communication. Sometimes I would get irritable if my parents continuously keep asking about this question, I would loudly yell at them that it is my personal affairs and tell them that I am an adult already who know what need to do and what cannot do. I also tell them that now it time to study and I need even more time to study because my native language is not English. So I do have much time to do other thing.

              In the recent days, they again talked about that affairs, I pretended not to answer them because I did not want to have any arguments anymore. However, they never stop talking about this. They admired other contemporaries had made a girlfriend, someone might get married. I argued I just want put all my energy on studying because at the beginning my father asked me to make studying come first. I also question them that if those people who have a girlfriend study very well, it would be the best if 3 out 10 people who have a girlfriend study well in school. So my conclusion is that most people who have a girlfriend cannot study well in school, I am not opposed to make a girlfriend, it dependents on if you have an ability to deal with two different matters of your school work and intimate relationship. I also consider I am not prepared to make a girlfriend because I do not have any income to consume for my girlfriend, do not talk more about the marriage. Love is relied on fate.

              Anyway, I consider it is better as well as realistic to live in the moment, we cannot guess right what will happen to us in the future, we cannot do any things to prevent something in the future from happening. So try best to do what you need to do to prepare your future instead of day dream and do nothing. So I am actually not worried my intimate relationship,
It is more important to remain unbiased to look at intimate relationship, everyone has a unique choose, and I chose to study.

Journal Entry 9


Mingdong Chen

Freshman composition

Ms. Nargiza Matyakubova

2 November 2013

Journal Entry # 9

                           Illegal immigration drills a hole on the bottom of economy

                     In the article “America Must Take Stronger Measures to Halt Illegal immigration” by Michael Scott, it analytically demonstrates that neither the local police nor Los Angeles Immigration and Naturalization Service (INS) shows much concern about the flows of illegal immigration (Michael 1), this may causes the gradually increasing illegal immigrants to steal into America, so the author eagerly appeals to the government for rigorous measures against the activity of illegal immigration. He also points out that the great amount of illegal immigrants all apply for health care, social welfare, and food stamps so on, illegal immigrant students educate at a high cost to the taxpayers annually, all of these gradually make the horrendous social costs just keep rising ceaselessly.( Michael 4). And I also strongly agree with this idea, because there are lots of supportive evidences show author’s point of view and back author’s standpoint.

                     Government pays high social costs to illegal immigrants’ living. There are continuously huge amount of illegal immigrants crossing the border of America yearly, the author states that those people illegally come for the purpose of better living condition, actually they work in the worst environment condition all of us. So the illegal immigrants begin to apply for all kinds of social welfare to support their daily life, such as Health Care, Food Stamps, retirement pension and so on. And their children’ costs of births and education are also covered by government. According to the article, it definitely points out that the state of California pay about $2.2 billon to educate the illegal immigrant K-12 students annually, and that money comes from its taxpayers, so we now can guess how much payment should America’s government of 50 states budget for education program yearly, it is approximately 100 billion! What’s more, taxpayers subsidize 96000 illegal immigrants births in statewide county hospital at yearly cost of $352 million, the food stamps yearly cost of $552 million for new born citizen children, $577 million cost to incarcerate those illegal alien felons, finally plus yearly $60 million health care cost for all kinds of services, so it makes government pay high cost for illegal immigrants instead of getting benefit from them

                     By looking at the above information, illegal immigrants act as if a termite bites out a hole on the bottom of wooden economy, which make a terrible role in the development of economy. So like Michael Scott says, America should unhesitatingly takes measures to strengthen its border enforcement to stop the flows of illegal immigrants and enforce immigration laws to prosecute those employers who hire illegal immigrants,

                     In conclusion, the illegal immigration makes a negative role in American economic development. Government has got to pay huge amount of costs for most of them. Therefore we should strongly appeal to government to take more measures to control the illegal immigration to improve its development of economy.

Journal Entry 8


Mingdong Chen

Freshman composition

Ms. Nargiza Matyakubova

2 November 2013

Journal Entry # 8

                                                  

                     Black Friday, its name comes from the retailers’ consideration, since it is the day after the festival of Thanksgiving, people will begin to plan to shop to prepare for the festival of Christmas, and the retailers hope the income to be increasing since lots of customers’ purchase bring the consumerism, the retailers use the black ink to record the profit, whereas they use the red ink to record the loss. So retailers surely hope the Black Friday can bring the high profit. On the contrary, the employee use the Black Friday to self-mockery, because that day is the busiest day of the year while someone are enjoying the shopping time. Three articles “Black Friday: Consumerism Minus Civilization” by Andrew Leonard, “For Black Friday First-Timer, Not a Night of Conversion” by Stephanie Clifford and Christopher Maag, and “Friday’s Deals May Not Be the Best” by Stephanie Clifford, all demonstrate what the quality of Black Friday influences bother the development of society and human beings’ realization, and hidden little-known story .

                     In the both articles “For Black Friday First-Timer, Not a Night of Conversion” and “Friday’s Deals May Not Be the Best”, both Stephanie Clifford and Christopher Maag describe those consumers’ the outer behavior of going shopping in the midnight of Thanksgiving, they are willing to spend time waiting outside the stores in the cold autumn night(Stephanie 10), and their rough behavior of pushing and squeezing each other when as song as the door is open(Stephanie 11), and most of the first time shopper consider that their first experiences of shopping in midnight of Thanksgiving are not as nice as what they expect, they cannot get what they plan to get, consumers may fight against each other over the products they like(Stephanie 25), and there are some unpredictable accident of fire case happening because of wrangle of products(Stephanie 2). What’s more, authors expose that the price of the discounted products are not cheapest in that day, whereas ironically the lower price may emerges before or after the Black Friday. Even though the price of product is lowest, its quality is relatively low as well. So what price, what goods( Stephanie 18).

                      In contrast with Stephanie Clifford and Christopher Maag describe, Andrew Leonard’s article emphatically intends to depict how the consumerism create influences on the inner psychological behaviors of consumers. Author thinks that the excessive shopping behaviors in Black Friday are insanity. He acknowledges the increasing consumerism will benefit the development of economy of society, but it is violent to humankinds, consumers become numb and easily persuaded by the ways used by the retailers to attract consumers, which is evident by the example of the Crazy Target Lady models her shopping utility belt,

                     In conclusion, the Day of Black Friday is traditional custom in American society, it actually help the development of society, make people enjoy its coming, anyway, it has its meaning, and consumerism emerges in human daily life and being decided by commoners.

Journal Entry 7


Mingdong Chen

Freshman composition

Ms. Nargiza Matyakubova

October 15 2013

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                               The fast food damages our health

We all know that the store Kentucky Fried Chicken (KFC) or McDonald’s is a kind of giant retail chain which is spread throughout all over the world. They are famous for offering cheap and fast food, but delicious. However, the food that comes from McDonald’s is contained high great amount of food hormone which can damage our health seriously; what’s more, it would cause other disease such as the diabetes, obesity and high blood pressure and so on. In the article “French Fries as contraband” by Kathy Mcmanus, the author indicates clearly that eating fast food can destroy our health which will cause gradually other unpredicted diseases, the other idea the author explores is that city government is taking some measures to reduce the fast food stores by giving away the food policy. I strongly agree that we should reduce the behavior of eating fast food or any junk food because of the importance of our health.

                     According to the article, a social study from the city of Los Angeles point out clearly that the phenomenon of eating fast food cause a lot of people to suffer from diabetes and obesity, it states “and the highest rates of diabetes and obesity, 30% of adults in the area are overweight,” it suggests that 3 out of 10 people get the disease of diabetes or obesity because they eat great amount of fast food in the stores, in the other words, it means that there still be many people who do not realize the truculence of unhealthy fast food. This is similar to my memory back in China, my friend always go to McDonald’s store twice a week for enjoyment. I advised him not to go there often because the fast food does not contain any nutrition which hurt his body, he replied me that he could not fend against the delicacy of fast food, so that he kept going to McDonald’s store as usual. One day I saw him in the street, I hardly recognized him if he did not call me, he became obese enough so that he felt regretful.

                     Furthermore, the article delves into how the city government carries out some measures to control the opening of fast food in the area, it says that “the city of Los Angeles recently sank its teeth into the issue by banning any new fast food restaurants from opening in a 32-square-mile are of low-income South Central LA for at least one year.” It explains that the government gives away the policies that prevent the new fast food stores from opening in one area at least on year. In the other words, it means that it can prevent a lot of people of that area from buying fast food, to make people get the realization of the perniciousness of fast food.
                     All in all, the article “French Fries as contraband” by Kathy Mcmanus raise an important issue to today’s world, we should obtain the realization that fast food can destroy our health, so we should reduce the habit of eating the junk food or any unhealthy food, because our health comes firs

Journal Entry 6


Mingdong Chen

Freshman composition

Ms. Nargiza Matyakubova

October 15 2013

 

                     In the “we wear the mask”, the author Paul Laurence Dunbar uses the contrast to convey how people can feel powerlessness and despair during the process of desperately struggling against the limitation. In this poem, the wearers want to try to take off their masks to restart the life, but the reality makes them continuous to cover their faces by wearing the masks.

                     In the first stanza of the poem, the author described the wearers’ facial appearance when he states “we wear the mask that grins and lies, it hides our cheeks and shades our eyes,” it suggests that the wearers communicate with others when they wear the masks to hide their true feelings, so that people can only see their emerging cheeks and eyes instead of their grin and lie, the reason they wear the mask is to “this debt we pay to human guile”, they usually deceives humankinds’ trust. In the rest of first stanza, the author depict the inner conflict of those wearers when he states “with torn and bleeding hearts we smile, and mouth with myriad subtleties”, which means that the wearers are suffering from wearing the mask, they cannot show their real faces or smiles because they are limited by the masks, actually they are getting tired of and regret wearing the mask day after day, so that as if their hearts are tearing as well as bleeding,

                     In the second stanza of poem, author represents the wearers’ grumble toward the reality by “be over- wise”, and they consider the force make them continuous to cover masks due to the fact that the world is over-wise, which is their faults. By stating “nay, let them only see us, while we wear the mask,” the wearers plan to wear the mask forever.

                     In the third stanza of poem, the author explores to look for spiritual guidance as well as the chance for salvation when he states “we smile, but, O great Christ, our cries to thee from tortured soul arise.” the wearers need the helps that the real world does not exist., so they are crying for helps while they smile to others. Next , the wearers express that they sing through the pain while staying the earth that is wicked by stating “we sing, but oh the clay is vile beneath our feet, and long the mile,” “our feet” as well as “long the mile” can make us think of a imagery of people walk in a long road, those may be the wearers, maybe they are looking for the hope.

                     Finally, in “we wear the mask”, the author Paul Laurence Dunbar utilizes inner conflict of the wearers to help show us that how people respond to the unfathomable and helpless limitation around them. Refer to our society, it seems gets cold as well as dumb, people start to isolate them by covering the mask, the truth is getting less important, the society is run by the money……